On ThursdayI was asleep when it happened......
I awoke suddenly...sitting straight up in my bed!
The noise came from the living room.
My heart pounding,
grabbed the baseball bat kept by the bed.
Looked down the hall.
The noise getting louder!
Lifting the bat, getting ready........
Slowly peaking around the doorway
Santa was eating cookies!!!!
Peace
I awoke suddenly...sitting straight up in my bed!
The noise came from the living room.
My heart pounding,
grabbed the baseball bat kept by the bed.
Looked down the hall.
The noise getting louder!
Lifting the bat, getting ready........
Slowly peaking around the doorway
Santa was eating cookies!!!!
Peace
23 comments:
So what sound does it makes when he hits the floor?
You gotta put out softer cookies....
I am so glad you did not hit Santa, he was in New York moving south to Florida...........
You beat the crap out of him I hope. Cheers!!
I knew it was Santa!! Do I win a prize?
I'm glad you didn't hit Santa. But did you let him finish all the cookies?
& you smack him up with a Louievile Slugger lol! Hope your feeling better Odat! :D
I LOVE your 55s! Another great one!
Phew glad it was him!
You ended your story with a cliff hanger. The suspense is killing me.....so did you cream him on the head and steal the toys?
anndi, Santa or the cookies? hahaha
buffalo, hardy har har.....
Sarge, and I hear he made it!
Matt-man, no my Santa is not the evil santa like yours! ;-)
Patti, Congrats! you get the rest of the cookies!!!
Lois, Almost, see above...
Roger, Nah I didn't hit him...he was having too much trouble trying to eat my cookies..ahahaha. and yeah, I'm feeling a wee bit better today, thanks.
Real, Thanks soo much!! ;-)
Cas, Yeah, me too!
LGS, well...not really...He was kinda cute tho...so I err, ....well you can fill in the blanks....hehe. Let's just say I got lots of toys! ;-)
Peace
What? Santa eating cookies on the job? He must belong to a great union that contractually allows him to eat cookies at work...
I was wondering how he got that gash on his head!
Was he snarfing them down that he made all that noise??? :)
Are you sure it wasn't cookie monster dressed as Santa?
Wow. Well done Odat! Really well done! Again, you do such a great job with space and powerful verbs. Nice. I need to get to work.
To the tune of "Santa got run-over.."
Santa got flattened by our Odat,
Munching cookies on Christmas Day.
Some say there's no such thing as Santa,
But for Chiropractors and EMT's they believe.
The setup, buildup and payoff: you have captured the essence of the short story in a handful of words. Even the ending has a twist (the intruder is not someone to fear but someone to welcome.) This is good work. Here is talent.
Hope you didn't scare him too badly :)
ralph, It must be a one man union then, huh? lol.
Katherine, no, that wasn't me, I swear I didn't do it! He must have hit his head on one of my cookies!
hehe.
claudia, i think he was cracking his teeth on them. lol
Pool, come to think of it, I think it was the cookie monster...COOOOOOKKKIEEEEEEEE.
cLAUDIA, THANKS SOOO MUCH!
Jeff, haha..you're soo funny! (very good!)
guy, wow...thanks!!!!!
hammer, You're so silly, Santa can't be scarred!!! ;-)
Peace
This is so cute! I really admire your ability to write so much in so few words while I am of the verbose persuasion.
You have a great gift for a punch line.
Yay! I love this one!
Wow, you nearly took out Santa. That would earn you a life-time spot on the naughty list for sure.
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