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Thursday, December 27, 2007

55 Flash Fiction Friday on Thursday

On Thursday
I was asleep when it happened......
I awoke suddenly...sitting straight up in my bed!
The noise came from the living room.

My heart pounding,
grabbed the baseball bat kept by the bed.
Looked down the hall.
The noise getting louder!

Lifting the bat, getting ready........
Slowly peaking around the doorway

Santa was eating cookies!!!!


Peace

23 comments:

Anndi said...

So what sound does it makes when he hits the floor?

buffalodickdy said...

You gotta put out softer cookies....

Sarge Charlie said...

I am so glad you did not hit Santa, he was in New York moving south to Florida...........

Matt-Man said...

You beat the crap out of him I hope. Cheers!!

Patti said...

I knew it was Santa!! Do I win a prize?

Lois Grebowski said...

I'm glad you didn't hit Santa. But did you let him finish all the cookies?

Roger said...

& you smack him up with a Louievile Slugger lol! Hope your feeling better Odat! :D

Real Live Lesbian said...

I LOVE your 55s! Another great one!

Casdok said...

Phew glad it was him!

Lone Grey Squirrel said...

You ended your story with a cliff hanger. The suspense is killing me.....so did you cream him on the head and steal the toys?

Odat said...

anndi, Santa or the cookies? hahaha

buffalo, hardy har har.....

Sarge, and I hear he made it!

Matt-man, no my Santa is not the evil santa like yours! ;-)

Patti, Congrats! you get the rest of the cookies!!!

Lois, Almost, see above...

Roger, Nah I didn't hit him...he was having too much trouble trying to eat my cookies..ahahaha. and yeah, I'm feeling a wee bit better today, thanks.

Real, Thanks soo much!! ;-)

Cas, Yeah, me too!

LGS, well...not really...He was kinda cute tho...so I err, ....well you can fill in the blanks....hehe. Let's just say I got lots of toys! ;-)

Peace

Ralph said...

What? Santa eating cookies on the job? He must belong to a great union that contractually allows him to eat cookies at work...

katherine. said...

I was wondering how he got that gash on his head!

Claudia said...

Was he snarfing them down that he made all that noise??? :)

My Reflecting Pool said...

Are you sure it wasn't cookie monster dressed as Santa?

Open Grove Claudia said...

Wow. Well done Odat! Really well done! Again, you do such a great job with space and powerful verbs. Nice. I need to get to work.

Jeff B said...

To the tune of "Santa got run-over.."

Santa got flattened by our Odat,
Munching cookies on Christmas Day.
Some say there's no such thing as Santa,
But for Chiropractors and EMT's they believe.

Guy Hogan said...

The setup, buildup and payoff: you have captured the essence of the short story in a handful of words. Even the ending has a twist (the intruder is not someone to fear but someone to welcome.) This is good work. Here is talent.

Hammer said...

Hope you didn't scare him too badly :)

Odat said...

ralph, It must be a one man union then, huh? lol.

Katherine, no, that wasn't me, I swear I didn't do it! He must have hit his head on one of my cookies!
hehe.

claudia, i think he was cracking his teeth on them. lol

Pool, come to think of it, I think it was the cookie monster...COOOOOOKKKIEEEEEEEE.

cLAUDIA, THANKS SOOO MUCH!

Jeff, haha..you're soo funny! (very good!)

guy, wow...thanks!!!!!

hammer, You're so silly, Santa can't be scarred!!! ;-)

Peace

heartinsanfrancisco said...

This is so cute! I really admire your ability to write so much in so few words while I am of the verbose persuasion.

You have a great gift for a punch line.

Christy said...

Yay! I love this one!

CS said...

Wow, you nearly took out Santa. That would earn you a life-time spot on the naughty list for sure.